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Friday, 30 June 2017

alma

Alma
I am walking around town, it is ice cold that it was snowing I could hear the snow falling on me. Hi my name is alma and I’m 10 years old. When you are 10 years old you can write your name on the blackboard with chalk. I walked to the door and tried to open the door but it wouldn’t open so I throw a snowball at the door then I walked away then the door opened so I went up to the door and I took one step.

I was amazed how many dolls were in there I started to get a bit scared. I was trying to grab the doll but I step on something it was a to. It was riding a bike so I standed up and the doll wasn’t there. I was saying in my head “where is the doll now I said” so I look up and tried to find the doll

Then I look down and it wasn’t there I looked up again and the doll was on the shelf and I said “how did that doll go up to that shelf.” I saw the doll on the shelf, I was climbing up to get the doll off the shelf and I took my glove off with my teeth and I was going to get the doll off the shelf and that doll was alive so I said to myself “this is a haunted shop.”

That how I became a doll forever. Now I have heaps of doll friend now  I can talk to them now I love being a doll it amazing. The end

4 comments:

  1. it is a really good. keep it up

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  2. OMG so good Michaela I love your writing so much

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  3. Hi Michaela,
    I really liked your story, but when you said, 'I step on something it was a to' what is a to? Also at the end you said, 'That's how i became a doll forever' but you never told us how you became a doll. Your work was really good though! : )
    From Mikayla

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