I was at my big sister’s farewell party. I was so worried to go down the slide. My mouth was shaking so fast and I couldn’t stop, so I took a big breath and I went down it. I was screaming.
When I went down the slide I was fell in the ball pit. I hurt myself so badly. When I touched my face a colourful lollipop was on my face and my face it was not clean. I said to myself “eww that gross,” so I pulled the lollipop off my face.
I was trying to climb up again. I could climb up but there was something. I had to jump on it but I was too scared to do. It was like I had to go down the slide. I jumped and I said to myself “that wasn’t hard after all.” It was so scary like going down the slide. I almost fell off and I was freaking out I said “today is a bad day.”
A bloody plaster was on top of one colourful balls and the blaster dropped on my face, then the bloody blaster went in my mouth and it was gross. I took off the plaster with my two hand then I almost fell off and another lollipop held me up so that I did not fall. The lollipop saved my life! I got out finally I got out it like it took me like 1 hour so I said “should I eat this,”. I picked up some balls and threw them in the air.
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Hi Michaela, what you wrote was a little difficult for me to read like when you said when I went down the slide I was fell in the ball pit that part didn't really make sense. Next time you might need to double check your writing but after all it was fabulous.
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